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Five mmonths ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter. say how long you now want to rent the apartment for explain why your plans have changed tell the owner about a problem in the apartment.

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Dear Sir, I am writing to
request
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ask
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 you
that about extending
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to extend
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contract
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 of the apartment for two years because of my new job.
Firstly
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, I would like to inform you that,
last
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 week, I found a new that as a cabin attendant. I worked as a passenger service officer
however
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 it was temporary,
therefore
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 I had to turn back to Antalya but I have a strong relationship with Istanbul, so I applied for a lot of companies to continue to stay
in
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here and
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finally
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 found it. So, because of the new role, I have to stay in the city for two years.
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, I am really proud of my apartment and neighbourhood,
however
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, my downstairs neighbour has been making a lot of noise all week. I warned her many times but we could not get along because she did not know Turkish or English. I would appreciate it if you could warn her in her native language.
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, I will ask to extend the lease agreement. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Ecem

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the structure of the letter by clearly separating the introduction, body, and conclusion. For example, start with a brief introduction stating your purpose before discussing your plans and the issue.
task achievement
Please elaborate on the details of the problem with your neighbor to provide more context; this will strengthen your request for assistance.
positive
The tone of the letter is polite and respectful, which is appropriate for this type of request.
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You've clearly explained your reason for needing an extension, which shows thoughtfulness in your situation.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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