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Overpopulation is the world's most serious environmental problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#overpopulation #world
It is frequently argued that the increase
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 population could lead to several environmental problems. In
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 I will try to give some examples and
then
 I will explain why I strongly agree with
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Firstly
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overpopulation is one of the most relevant
problem
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 for the Earth due to the fact that we have limited resources and there is not enough food for everyone.
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, for the people who live in remote areas, for
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 in some villages in Africa, is more difficult to find food or clean water and the rate of naissance is around fivefold than the European data, in fact ,each family has more than 4
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 and
this
 can lead to the lacking of resources as a consequence of migration to developed countries.
Although
 we live in a place where we can find whatever we want, it is important to understand that in some places around the world the overpopulation is causing problems like malnutrition and
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unhealthy
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 diet due to the lack of food.For
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 reason, the European countries have to provide free meals to the people who need them because It is a
globally
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 problem even if it is
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 in some remote areas. In conclusion, I think that the steady but significant increase
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 population can lead to several problems due to the fact that we have not enough resources for everyone
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therefore
 it is important to be aware
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 the problem and to find some solutions, one of them can be going to another planet in the middle of the space.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exacerbating
  • finite resources
  • environmental degradation
  • biodiversity
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable consumption
  • habitat loss
  • family planning
  • renewable energy
  • technological advancements
  • resource management
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