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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are two types of professionals based on how they choose places where they are going to
work
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 after graduating from their training. It is debatable whether they choose to
work
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 in the same
country
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 where they got their degree or not. People are divided into two different sides of
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 issue, the one who thinks it is a must to
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 in the same
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 and the one who thinks it is their freedom to choose which
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 they want to
work
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 in.
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 essay will discuss both sides of the argument and provide clear explanations
why
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 it is required for them to
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 in the same
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.
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, they owe to the
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 where they pursue their degree, especially if they get a scholarship for that.
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, governments who provide scholarships for medicine schools clearly want to escalate local health services quality by helping potential doctor candidates to study medicine. They have spent a lot of money in order to establish great doctors who will be expected to cure the other citizens who get sick.
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, it is common sense that these doctors or professionals need to contribute back by working in that
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.
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, they tend to learn knowledge that suits that
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's characteristics.
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, engineers who learn civil engineering in a
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prone to earthquakes will tend to learn how to build strong buildings that are safe from earthquakes. Engineers who study in
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 territory will be capable of constructing buildings that are safe from winter storms.
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, the more suitable their knowledge to the
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's needs, the better and the more maximum they can utilize their skills. In conclusion, I believe that requiring professionals to stay and make use of their
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 in the same place where they pursued them is a great policy.
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, the benefits and positive effects both the
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 and the individuals will gain are much more. Because if they do not contribute back to their surroundings,
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 their surroundings can not receive good impacts from them.

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task achievement
To enhance Task Achievement, ensure a more balanced discussion of both views before presenting your own opinion. Incorporate specific examples that illustrate both sides of the argument to make your stance more persuasive and comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Strengthen Coherence and Cohesion by using a wider range of cohesive devices and transition words to link ideas more smoothly between and within paragraphs. Additionally, organizing paragraphs in a way that clearly separates discussion points can also enhance clarity and flow.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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