WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter ask what types of membership are available, and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the joining procedure is You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#minutes #gym #neighbourhood #manager #membership #prices #activities #procedure #addresses #sir #madam

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regard to know more about the new

gym

that recently opened close to my house. I

was

Wrong verb form

have been

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planning to start working out

since

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for

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a few weeks and it is good

know

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to know

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about the

gym

being

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closed

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Although

, I would like to get some details about the types of membership you provide and their rates as well. It has been a long time since I exercised,

hence

I would prefer a membership for less than 6 months.

Secondly

, what all kinds of

equipments

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equipment

types of equipment

pieces of equipment

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and

gym

activities are included for members?

This

is something that I look forward to, because I did not have a pleasing experience at the

last

gym

I went to.

Lastly

, I would be interested

for

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some trial sessions at the

gym

this

week. It would be even better if I could get some guidance regarding the joining procedure. Thank you for reading

this

letter and I look forward to your from you. Yours Faithfully, Lavin.

Submitted by lavinramnani8 on Sun Oct 20 2024

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grammar

Consider reviewing the placement of the word 'know' in the second sentence of the first paragraph. Correct phrasing could be, 'I am writing to inquire about the new gym that recently opened near my house.'

coherence

Remove the word 'Although' at the beginning of the second paragraph, as it implies a contrast that isn't present in the text.

task achievement

Incorporate specific questions or requests for information regarding the activities such as yoga classes, personal training, etc., to enhance task achievement if possible.

greeting and closing

The letter has a clear structure with a friendly greeting and an appropriate closing.

single idea per paragraph

Each paragraph focuses on a specific point, which contributes to the overall coherence and makes it easier to follow the writer’s train of thought.

suitable writing tone

The overall tone is polite and appropriately formal.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

166 words

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