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Nowadays ,the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what way has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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 era, the method by which
people
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 communicate with one another has altered due to
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advanced
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.
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 has
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enormously
injuriously
 affected the types of
relarionships
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relationships
people
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 have in several different ways.
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 has become a positive development but still with certain drawbacks.
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society and its effects will be put forward. As a matter of fact,in previous generations,it was quite difficult to meet
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people
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 who are in foreign countries.The best way which we could use to keep in touch was by phoning or sending letters.
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, nowadays,we could easily text messages and send gmails or emails.Nay,we can even video chat with friends abroad.What is more, children are able to learn online via zoom and other platforms.Online learning has become even more ubiquitous during Covid 19 pandemic which broke out in 2019.
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,student and teacher interaction
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 not as amiable and familiar as the real classroom situation. It is indispensable that the impact of
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 on relationships has positive
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repercussions
. We can immediately contact our parents,relatives,acquaintances and friends easily whenever we desire.
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, teachers can thoroughly explain lessons to
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students
 online and children can be
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 to knowledge and lessons to some extent.What is more,business corporations can organize online meetings with
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 executives,boards and assistants.So, the business industry has innumerable benefits owing to modern
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.
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,it
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 holds some disadvantages.The relationships of modern
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 are adversely affected by
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 since
people
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 are willing to meet online rather than to actually have a face-to-face conversation outdoors.If the citizens are solely eager to have virtual conversations,the
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communication
 qualities of those guys will deteriorate and they might be regarded as ill-mannered or rude human beings in the long run. In a nutshell,due to advanced science and
technology
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, various aspects of humans are affected including social communication.Just because it is more convenient and easy to keep in touch with our beloved ones,it does not necessarily follow that it lacks unanticipated side effects.Thence,
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 should exploit
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 social platforms and at the same time, they should not
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 of communication.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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