Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There are some
people
considering that competitive events should not be held in
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at
age
. However
, It is thought that adults should teach cooperation rather than giving a chance children
competing someone
. I would believe that both of these skills are needed in the society
in adult age
. However
, I would consider that cooperation with other people
is more important in real life.
To begin
, There are some adults think
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who think
Children
should be taught how to be competitive against other children
. This ideas
are considered to give benefits to Change the determiner
This idea
These ideas
children
. For example
, most of
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people
in the world live in Add an article
the people
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a capitalism
capitalism
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capitalist
society
in which companies always have to beat other companies to survive so that they can make benefits as well as it is possible to keep running the business
. This
is how the
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apply
society
works nowadays. Therefore
, encountering competitions at young
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a young
age
will help youth people
learn ways of surviving and fighting against someone
in the future in a market.
On the other hand
, some people
argue that knowing how to cooperate with someone
is more important than just trying to beat other kids and it is more worth gaining the skill that can be used in the
their future. As I mentioned above, Remove the article
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for instance
, they need to live and fight competitively. However
, a business
is run by a lot of workers unless you have an individual company. Many people
gather one
place to cooperate Change preposition
in one
each
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with each
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, which Fix the agreement mistake
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cooperation is significantly needed in the office. If Remove the article
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someone
is not helpful or not keen to support other co-workers, the business
does not go proper
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the proper
an
unemployment eventually. Remove the article
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Thus
, even though we need to beat other companies, we are still required to have supportive
mind for other co-workers to keep running the Add an article
a supportive
the supportive
business
correctly.
To conclude, In spite of living in the
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a
capitalism
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capitalist
society
which requires us to be competitive in a market, we all need to be supportive for
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of
other
. Correct pronoun usage
others
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Therefore
Therefor
, we should be taught how to be supportive and help Correct your spelling
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someone
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