Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are some
people
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considering that competitive events should not be held
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young
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, It is thought that adults should teach cooperation rather than giving a chance
children
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competing
someone
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. I would believe that both of these skills are needed in the
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in adult
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.
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, I would consider that cooperation with other
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is more important in real life.
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, There are some adults
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that
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should be taught how to be competitive against other
children
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.
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This ideas
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are considered to give benefits to
children
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.
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, most
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people
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the people
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in the world live in
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a capitalism
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capitalism
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society
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in which companies always have to beat other companies to survive so that they can make benefits as well as it is possible to keep running the
business
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.
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is how
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society
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works nowadays.
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, encountering competitions at
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age
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will help youth
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learn ways of surviving and fighting against
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in the future in a market.
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, some
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argue that knowing how to cooperate with
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is more important than just trying to beat other kids and it is more worth gaining the skill that can be used in
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their future. As I mentioned above,
for instance
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, they need to live and fight competitively.
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, a
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is run by a lot of workers unless you have an individual company. Many
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gather
one
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in one
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place to cooperate
each
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with each
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other for
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, which
a
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cooperation is significantly needed in the office. If
someone
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is not helpful or not keen to support other co-workers, the
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does not go
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way, which will result in
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unemployment eventually.
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, even though we need to beat other companies, we are still required to have
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mind for other co-workers to keep running the
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correctly. To conclude, In spite of living in
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capitalism
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society
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which requires us to be competitive in a market, we all need to be supportive
for
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of
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other
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others
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.
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, we should be taught how to be supportive and help
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at
young
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a young
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age
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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