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Films and games can be accessed at any time from mobile devices, like smartphones, tablets and laptop computers. Do the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is argued, as the technology and internet developed rapidly technology devices
such
 as smartphones and computers become more universal and can easily provide a lot of entertainment like games and
movies
 are providing benefits to the user. In my opinion,
this
 development has more drawbacks than advantages. There are several reasons to support my point of view.
First
 of all, it can cause users physical issues
such
 as back pain, dry eyes and headache because
people
 use them to watch videos constantly.
For example
, there is a great number of reports to shows that because
people
 use their smartphones watching videos frequently
thus
 lead
them
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have dry eyes or even worst consequences.
Moreover
, it can be extremely harmful activities for young
people
, because it not only just cause physical issues
also
 can lead children to have
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mental problem if they overuse those kinds of devices.
For instance
, in many countries, the parents and the government are suffering at how to fix the problems of young
people
 addicted to computer online games and
also
 the children could not leave their smartphones.
On the other hand
, it brings extra entertainment and convenience to our life and easy to kill time by playing games or watching
movies
.
For example
, you could easily access a game and play it on your smartphone while you are waiting for your friend.
In addition
, it is more convenient compared to the old days we have to enter the cinema to watching
movies
 because we could watch
movies
 on our technology devices whenever we want. In conclusion,
this
 development might brings convenience to our daily life.
However
, we can not ignore the harmful effects
such
 as physical and mental problems that bring by
this
 development to us.
Therefore
, I believe that its' drawbacks are outweighed the advantages.
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