Films and games can be accessed at any time from mobile devices, like smartphones, tablets and laptop computers. Do the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

It is argued, as the technology and internet developed rapidly technology devices
as smartphones and computers become more universal and can easily provide a lot of entertainment like games and
are providing benefits to the user. In my opinion,
development has more drawbacks than advantages. There are several reasons to support my point of view.
of all, it can cause users physical issues
as back pain, dry eyes and headache because
use them to watch videos constantly.
For example
, there is a great number of reports to shows that because
use their smartphones watching videos frequently
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have dry eyes or even worst consequences.
, it can be extremely harmful activities for young
, because it not only just cause physical issues
can lead children to have
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mental problem if they overuse those kinds of devices.
For instance
, in many countries, the parents and the government are suffering at how to fix the problems of young
addicted to computer online games and
the children could not leave their smartphones.
On the other hand
, it brings extra entertainment and convenience to our life and easy to kill time by playing games or watching
For example
, you could easily access a game and play it on your smartphone while you are waiting for your friend.
In addition
, it is more convenient compared to the old days we have to enter the cinema to watching
because we could watch
on our technology devices whenever we want. In conclusion,
development might brings convenience to our daily life.
, we can not ignore the harmful effects
as physical and mental problems that bring by
development to us.
, I believe that its' drawbacks are outweighed the advantages.
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