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Machines are taking over more and more jobs previously done by humans. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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Human biengs are being replaced by machinaries these days.
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 is quite evident in the economy as more and more people are unemployed
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 the revolution of technology and fast paced economy. Though there are certain flaws associated with the sentiment,
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 there are certain benefits attached with it. I would detail it in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
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, from the perspective of humankind it can be seen that
machines
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 are taking over thier role. Majority of industrial sectors are installing equipment to get thier
work
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 done, which is costing the jobs of the
employees
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 working in there.
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; Rearing of milk from cattles have shifted to sucking
machines
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 which was earlier done by humans.
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, from employer's view point
work
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 is getting done at a faster pace and with no dependency on labour, which in turn skyrockets the profit.
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, employee working in the organisation have to capitulate under the conandrum,
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: TCS have laid off upto 20% of employee by substituting them with AI designed interface.
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, there are certain benefits associated with these changes and they are as follows:
work
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 that used to be tedious and time consuming have transformed to be fast paced and effective, examples
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 as; sorting, labeling, packing and dispatching. To add on, Employers less inclination towards
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 have made them indepedent. They no need to worry on turnover rate of
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 nor they have to focus on meeting their psychological needs.
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, I would opine that employers should integrate eventually both the machinery and
employees
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, rather than replacing them completely. It is because I do believe there certain
work
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 which cannot be done by
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 as it would need the emotional quotient capability of humans, which
machines
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 cannot surpass.
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