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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

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The universe has always been a very mysterious thing to humans. As science and technology have rapidly developed, scientists have been trying to discover
life
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other
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 planets with the help of
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money
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, some
people
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 want the
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 to control the budgets for
space
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projects
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 and focus more on solving the problems of
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. In
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 essay, I will explain why spending for the
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 living in
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 world is more important. In the
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astronomers have been trying to find the possibility of
life
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 on other planets for many years.
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, all
projects
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 require a huge amount of
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 from the
government
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 to operate diverse thesis, create spaceships, and so on.
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, spending billions of dollars on
space
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projects
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 is not sensible because
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projects
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 have resulted in minor achievements,
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, discovering water on Mars and Moon. Some
people
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 think that
government
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 should reduce the expenditure on
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 exploration and expend more on public issues,
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, global warming, air pollution, inadequate transportation, etcetera. All of the problems should be solved to improve
people
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's quality of
life
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.
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, some
people
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 who live in underestimated the quality of
life
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 countries have deficient the basic factors, and lack of education for children. It is the
government
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’s responsibility to spend
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 on the welfare of the general public.
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, more funds can be allocated for building schools and hospitals. To conclude, advancement of technology and
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 exploration are important so budget allocation should contribute in suitable quantity with no effect
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 other necessary
projects
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.
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, taxpayers’
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 should be used to improve the overall living standard of the
people
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.
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