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Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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Several
people
 believe a large amount of
money
 is significant for having a wonderful life. One of the reasons why some
people
 think a lot of
money
 is the primary way to make them happy is
money
 can purchase everything they desire, and another reason is how much
money
 they have will
show
 their status in society.
Nevertheless
,
Love
 is another factor to make
people
 appreciated their life.
Firstly
, Having a huge amount of
money
 can afford everything they require. It is deniable that
money
 is important. Nowadays, either you would like to buy some basic goods or luxury goods you must have enough
money
.
Secondly
,
Money
 will
show
 your status in your community. Many times
people
 judge others by how much
money
 they have, or what brand of cars that they have.
As a result
,
people
 try to push their position to be on top of society. One of my best friends,
for instance
, works a full-time job and a part-time job to earn more
money
 because she needs to purchase a new car which is more
luxury
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luxurious
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 than the old one. She told me that everybody in her office
drive
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drives
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 expensive cars
such
 as BMW, Benz and so on, so, to
show
 her status is alike, she has to work harder and purchases an expensive car.
On the other hand
,
Love
 is a powerful factor to make
people
 happy. Various
people
 said that they have a lot of
money
, but they are not satisfied. Lack of
love
 is the main reason why they are dissatisfied.
For example
, my aunt who has a successful work-life is not delighted because of a complicated relationship. She would like to have
life
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a life
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 like her sister because her sister has a great husband and wonderful children.
Although
, Her sister is just a housewife. All in all, the reasons why
people
 consider a lot of
money
 can make them happy are
money
 can afford everything you require, and
money
 can
show
 your position in your community.
However
, something cannot purchase via
money
,
that is
love
, so some
people
 think they will be delighted when they are surrounding with
love
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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