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With the increased global demand for oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

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Today, the demand for fossil-based fuels is increasing rapidly.
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, to access more
resources
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 unexplored territories should be opened up.
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, while I believe that the demand for
oil
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 and
gas
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 has increased tremendously, and new territories will help to improve the situation, I think that it will cause massive ecological issues.
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 of all, discovering new sources of
oil
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 and
gas
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 would cause problems associated with global warming. Digging enormous areas will increase the likelihood of temperature increase, which will result in melting ice caps.
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 will lead to flooding, famines and major global problems.
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, these kinds of
resources
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 will increase emissions into the atmosphere which will strengthen the likelihood of many diseases from tuberculosis to cancer.
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, countries that rely on the usage of non-renewable natural
resources
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 of
energy
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 will not be motivated to use ecologically clean
energy
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resources
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.
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, after mining the deposits of
oil
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 and
gas
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, they will not be as expensive as they are now.
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, prices for these
resources
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 will fall tremendously and it will encourage other countries to use them.
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, Germany has planned to switch to wind and solar
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instead
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 because of the rapid depletion of fossil fuels. I believe that exploitation of ecologically clean
resources
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 of
energy
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 would improve the situation To conclude, while some think that the discovery of new deposits of
gas
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 and
oil
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 will improve the situation with the scarcity of mineral
resources
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, I am of the opinion that it will lead to massive global problems from flooding to climate change.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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