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You are renting an apartment. Write a letter to your landlord regarding a noise problem from your neighbors. Include the following in your letter: – What is the problem? – What have you done about it? – What would you like the landlord to do?

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Dear Mr. Brown I am writing to bring to your attention
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an ongoing noise issue that has recently developed at your building
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 coming from my next flatmate. Almost every late night, there is an unreasonable level of noise which is produced by bass music and shouting coming from Apartment 4B every Tuesday and Thursday until 1:00 AM.
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 it is severely impacting my ability to sleep and because of
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, I can not concentrate
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 is hampering my study for
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 I attempted to resolve
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 amicably by knocking on their door twice to politely ask them to turn it down, and left a courteous note on their door yesterday. But the problem has continued despite my attempts to handle the
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. I would be grateful if you could intervene and speak with them directly to give a formal written warning
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 them of the building's "quiet hours" clause in the tenancy agreement. Your sincerely Peter BH

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Say that the noise comes from your next-door neighbor, not “my next flatmate”, as this is more clear.
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Add your flat number or address so the landlord can act more easily.
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Use “My final exams” or “my upcoming final exams” to make this part sound more natural.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear order: problem, what you did, and what you want. Keep this order.
coherence and cohesion
Do not start a sentence with “Although” and then use “But” in the next sentence. Write: “I have tried to solve this in a calm way. I knocked on their door twice and left a note yesterday.”
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Use “Yours sincerely” at the end, not “Your sincerely”.
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You answer all the main parts of the task: the noise, what you did, and what you want the landlord to do.
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Your request for a written warning is clear and fits the problem.
coherence and cohesion
Each main point has its own paragraph, so the letter is easy to follow.
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The opening and tone are polite and right for a letter to a landlord.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ongoing noise problem
  • excessive noise
  • late-night disturbance
  • loud music
  • noisy gatherings
  • disturb the peace
  • interrupt my sleep
  • affect my daily routine
  • speak to the neighbours
  • raise the issue politely
  • resolve the matter
  • building regulations
  • tenancy agreement
  • quiet hours
  • remind them of their responsibilities
  • contact the tenants directly
  • take appropriate action
  • find a reasonable solution
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