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The advent of the internet has made it it possible for people to work from home. Do you feel this working arrangement has more advantages or disadvantages? Share personal experiences In your essay.

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In the present, the
movies
 and books regarding illegal acts impact most
people
 in several countries. The reasons why they become
people
favorite's
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movies
 are because they are more exciting than other kinds of
movies
 and usually
show
 both the dark
side
 and the bright
side
 of humans. The primary reason,
The
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crime
movies
 or books are more exciting than other kinds of
movies
due
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 to a twisting plot.
This
 kind of movie always has many twists in a plot, especially at the end of the movie, so most
people
 are thrilled by them and continue to watch them.
For example
, one of my best friends is a big fan of the Criminal minds series. She said it has various twists in a plot every episode
hence
, she watched
this
 series every season and more than once.
Moreover
, she spreads it out to her friends. Another reason, The
movies
 about unlawful acts usually
show
 both the dark
side
 and the bright
side
 of humans that are difficult to see in real life. Namely, nobody announces the dark
side
 of themselves to other
people
.
In
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 usual,some of the crime dramas
show
 the corruption in police forces or
show
 a reason what are the factors that make some
people
 become criminals.
For instance
, Doctor Prisoner which is a
korean
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 drama
,
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 shows the doctor who became
a the
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 prisoner because he corrupted his duty and killed a patient.
This
 storyline shows the doctor who should be a good man has another
side
 as a criminal. In my point of view, I think crime films are exciting and everybody is taught about other
people
's mistakes by
watching
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.
However
, they have numerous scenes of violence so be careful, if the children watch them. All in all,the popularity of the film is relevant illegal acts are increasing because they are thriller than other kinds of films, and
show
 both the dark
side
 and the bright
side
 of humans.
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