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In many nations, people in huge cites either live alone or in samll family units, instead of a large, extended family. Is this a positive or negative trend?

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There is a
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 that most
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 living in metropolitan areas prefer to live alone or with a small number of family members, rather than with a large family as in the past. Some
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 see
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 as a welcoming
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, and others see it as a negative
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. I agree with the latter view. Keeping a small family does reduce the cost of living in a big city, especially nowadays when house prices and rents are increasing day by day.
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, living alone in a small flat can cause more serious issues, like mental problems. Bigger cities bring more opportunities but
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 more pressure. Especially as social creatures, it is not enough for
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 to relieve their emotions on their own and social media. That
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 means that family is precious to those swamped with work, and only accompanying can bring them some comfort. It is a dangerous
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 for these
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 who live alone and their families left behind elsewhere. They are unable to see their families for long durations, particularly the elderly who have been left behind in their hometowns and who need not only psychological companionship but
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 physical help. Unfortunately, their children are so far away and occupied with work that they have to go to the hospital themselves when they need an operation. In conclusion, I reiterate my view that keeping a small size of the family in big cities is a negative
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.
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 need to strike a balance between their material needs and their psychological needs, rather than just giving up one side to preserve the other.
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