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Some scientists argue that educating people should eat less junk food to stay healthy, but others think educated people do not work. Discuss both opinions and talk about do you agree or not agree.

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Nowadays, in the 21st century,
people
 pay more attention to living healthier
instead
 of just surviving.
That is
 why scientists argue we should eat less
junk
food
 than we did in the past.
However
, other
people
 think it is useless to educate
people
.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the question and
then
 give my opinion: educating
people
 is better than doing nothing. To some extent, I can understand why some
people
 are against the suggestion of scientists. They believe that some
people
 are always reluctant to listen to the authorities, so they will disregard anything said by a scientist or government, because they feel it is their right to choose whether they eat healthy or not.
Therefore
, trying to educate
people
 is a waste of time and money.
On the contrary
, others think that educating
people
 to eat less
junk
food
 is one of the duties of scientists, and I stand with those
people
. Not everyone knows that the sun rises in the east, just as not everyone knows the dangers of
junk
food
 and exactly what foods are considered
junk
food
.
For instance
, some
people
 think sandwiches are healthy because they have tomatoes. In fact, restaurants add some sauce onto the tomato and the sauce is full of fats, sugar and carbohydrates that can make
people
 fat, which is why we see sandwiches as
junk
food
. The reason is
also
 to explain why education is essential. In conclusion, I reiterate the firm belief that educating
people
 not to eat a lot of
junk
food
 is an indispensable step to getting
people
 to start realising how they can reach their goal: healthy living, not just chanting slogans.
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