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A friend from another coutry moving to your city for work. he asked you to advise about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1. suggest an interesting part of the city to live in. 2. describe the public transport in your city. 3. say how your friend can meet new people there.

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Dear John, I hope you're doing great. I'm extremely happy to
heard
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 that you got an opportunity to
persue
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pursue
 your career in Canada. Canada is a beautiful and developed nation and I would love to tell you more about it. As you already mentioned
that
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your job is in
the
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Toronto
city
. But I would suggest you to live in the Brampton
city
. First of
all
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 you gonna get a rental place easily here,
secondly
, you will surely meet other individuals that belong to your
religin
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religion
 as well.
Moreover
, the transportation of the State is impressive. There is a direct train from Brampton to Toronto that runs every hour.
In addition
, you can either take
bus
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 service which is cheaper or
carpooling
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 which is accessible.
Similarly
, most of the land in
this
city
 is
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 for residence.
Therefore
, you can find
alot
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a lot
 of amusement parks, gardens and playgrounds for public use.
Also
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 you will see less traffic in Brampton as compared to other provinces. I hope
this
peace
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piece
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 of advice will help you to get
familier
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familiar
 with the
City
. Best Wishes, Harpreet.
Submitted by harpreet291kaur on

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Grammar
Proofread your letter for minor grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues and correct word usage.
Content
Consider elaborating more on the types of activities or public areas where people can meet new friends.
Task Achievement
The letter covers all the necessary points requested in the task (suggesting an interesting part of the city to live in, describing public transportation, and ways to meet new people).
Tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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