In many countries children are getting fatter and less fit day by day. Why is it so and suggest solutions.

In some parts of the world, there is an increasing trend of
children
getting less fit and putting on more weight.
This
essay will discuss some of the reasons for
this
trend and propose measures to mitigate them. One of the biggest contributing
factor
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to
children
getting fatter is the increased
consumption
of fast
food
.
Children
often are influenced by seeing more and more fast-
food
consumption
around them and give in to the temptation of following the trend. Fast
food
is notoriously famous for its paucity of nutritional value and for the harm it causes to one’s health. Research has shown that fast
food
is one of the main culprits for the increase in obesity around the world.
Therefore
, with increased
consumption
of fast
food
amongst
children
, they are prone to become obese. To tackle
this
problem, there needs to be contribution both from the government and the
parents
.
Parents
should encourage
children
to follow a more nutritional diet by
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offering them small incentives as
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reward
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,
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so that they are more motivated to eat healthier
food
. As for the latter,
government
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should ban the sale of fast
food
, in and around the school campus, and
instead
, promote
sale
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the sale
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of healthier
food
, so that the
children
would have less accessibility to fast
food
and would be naturally forced to replace it with what is available. As for the issue of
children
becoming less fit, a chief reason is
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children
these days are not active.
This
is because of the increased availability of the means to play video games. With every household having electronic
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like computers, tablets and multiple
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smartphones
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smart phones
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,
this
problem has only worsened.
For example
, it is very common these days that
children
often sit in one place for hours playing video games,
instead
of, going out and playing with other
children
. To mitigate
this
issue,
parents
should restrict the use of
the
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electronic devices for
the
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children
.
As a result
,
children
would be pushed to play outdoor with other
children
and once they would realise the pleasure of doing so, they would make it part of their routine. In conclusion, two of the main reasons for
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children
becoming more obese and less healthy are the increased
consumption
of fast
food
and the increase in
sedentary
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activity like playing video games.
However
, these issues can be mitigated if
parents
offer the
children
incentives for healthy eating and restrict screen time
,
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and if the government replaces fast
food
with healthy options, in and around
school
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campus
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.
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