In many countries children are getting fatter and less fit day by day. Why is it so and suggest solutions.
In some parts of the world, there is an increasing trend of
children
getting less fit and putting on more weight. Use synonyms
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essay will discuss some of the reasons for Linking Words
this
trend and propose measures to mitigate them.
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children
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consumption
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around them and give in to the temptation of following the trend. Fast Use synonyms
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is notoriously famous for its paucity of nutritional value and for the harm it causes to one’s health. Research has shown that fast Use synonyms
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is one of the main culprits for the increase in obesity around the world. Use synonyms
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, they are prone to become obese. To tackle Use synonyms
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government
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and would be naturally forced to replace it with what is available.
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is because of the increased availability of the means to play video games. With every household having electronic Linking Words
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this
problem has only worsened. Linking Words
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children
often sit in one place for hours playing video games, Use synonyms
instead
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children
would be pushed to play outdoor with other Use synonyms
children
and once they would realise the pleasure of doing so, they would make it part of their routine.
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children
becoming more obese and less healthy are the increased Use synonyms
consumption
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food
and the increase in Use synonyms
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activity like playing video games. Add an article
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, these issues can be mitigated if Linking Words
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite