Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opnion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

Several people think that children are taught by
schools
how to be a good
parent
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. It would be a good idea. In my point of view, I agree with
this
idea because to be an ideal family they can learn from
schools
.
Furthermore
, I consider
skills
that the person desires to be a great mother or father are
leadership
skills
and
well organized
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skills
. The reason why I agree with it is to be a good
parent
they can learn in
schools
. Some young ages do not have a delighted family, so teachers should teach them how to be a delighted
parent
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. Based on my local school,
it
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has a session
that is
called Wonderful Family. It teaches about how to be a nice
parent
. Every student has to learn it.
As a result
of
this
course, some students grow up to have their families. They have great
skills
to look after theirs. The
skills
which are significant to be a good mother or father are
leadership
skills
and
well
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organized. I think these two
skills
are absolutely amazing.
Firstly
,
leadership
skills
is
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the primary skill that I consider because when some people have their own children they must be leaders in every step of their kids' lives.
Secondly
, being well organized is another device which parents should have. Because they have many things that they carry on
such
as taking care of their children, doing housework and going out to do their jobs. So, they have to organize all of their duties. In conclusion, I agree with
this
idea because to be a delighted
parent
they should learn in
schools
. And
leadership
skills
and
well
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being well
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organized are major
skills
of
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an ideal
parent
should have.
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