Popular events like the football World Cup and other international occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotion In a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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with great support and expectations. I think these famous events can help in bringing solace internationally but the opinions usually differ. While famous games like
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Cup and Olympics can contribute to
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peace but
on the other hand
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nations are competing with each other which might be a cause of hatred amongst nations.
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, A cricket match between India and Pakistan are always big
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where
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full of tensions overflow. In the worst
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the troubles caused by losing
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affect the players directly. These two rival countries have their patriotic emotions explode in an aggressive way. There are some instances when two rival territories have sought their differences because of these sports.
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; In 2008 turkey and
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were set to play a
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Cup and the Turkish President accepted. Armenia loosened visa restrictions so that Turkish fans could join the game. Match opened new
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channels between countries. In conclusion, though international sporting occasions can be one of the good ways to ease tensions;
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, I believe that games cannot be fundamental ways for
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peaceful
international relationships.
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