It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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are frequently discussed these days. It is argued that it is vital for
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to learn appropriate
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during their childhood. I completely agree with the sanction for
children
according to several reasons which will be discussed clearly in the following paragraphs. The most crucial reason to convict a child is to make them aware of the immoral act.
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means that they will realize what was an unacceptable thing when they are convicted. Another thing to consider is that if we ignore these mistakes, they are prone to repeat
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as well as become disobedient.
Therefore
, proper punishing could teach them to avoid
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repeating offences. An illustration of
this
is that If a child bullying others is punished by a teacher immediately, he will not
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attempt
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again.
However
, punishments should restrict to
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level only.
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could ask a child to stand outside the classroom.
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, if
parents
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, they may become even more rebellious. An additional point is that
parents
can use an emotional punishment.
For example
,
parents
stop talking with their
children
if they are not complete their homework.
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,
parents
could refrain from awarding
such
as toys and remind them why they are not suitable to obtain
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. Taking into account all of the reasons, some sort of punishment is an essential thing to recognize
children
to distinguish good things from bad ones.
Nevertheless
, punishment by physical
such
as beating should not be employed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral development
  • Positive reinforcement
  • Negative reinforcement
  • Behavioral psychology
  • Disciplinary methods
  • Corporal punishment
  • Psychological effects
  • Authoritative parenting
  • Permissive parenting
  • Behavioural correction
  • Ethical considerations
  • Legal frameworks
  • Cognitive development
  • Social norms
  • Character building
  • Restorative practices
  • Authoritarian approach
  • Constructive criticism
  • Pro-social behavior
  • Conditioning
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