You child is going on a school trip overseas for week. The Headmaster is looking for parents to join the trip. Write a letter to state that you would like to join it. In your letter: Mention why you would like to join the trip. Ask some general questions about the trip. Mention how you can be helpful
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to draw your attention that I would like to join the trip to Austria on the 15th of April.
Let me start by saying that I decided to send
this
email because I would love supporting children and I recognize this
is a wonderful time for sharing and laughing together.
However
, I am interested to know the length of the journey, and also
if we must boost a specific vaccination. Finally
, if we need to apply for a tourist visa through an agency or our own.
As a parent of three children, I have previous experience and skills in childcare. Besides
, I also
hold a certification in a
first aid, which I enclosed. Correct article usage
apply
In addition
, I have a diploma in psychology.
I hope that you will take my suggestions into consideration, and please do not hesitate to contact me to discuss further
.
Yours faithfully,
Claudia PatinoSubmitted by klaudia2301 on
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task response
Try to elaborate more on the reasons why you would like to join the trip to make your motivation clearer.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that all questions about the trip are clearly stated and possibly grouped together for better readability.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite and suitable for the context.
logical structure
There is a clear structure with paragraphs dedicated to different points of the letter.
greeting and closing
The closing is polite and provides a way for further contact.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite