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Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #university #study #lack #workers #electricians #plumbers
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It is true that many
people
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 prefer to pursue academic studies at university rather than to follow vocational
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.
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 I agree that the need for academic graduates can be denied, there is still a shortage of skilled
workers
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, including electricians and plumbers. There are several reasons why more
workers
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 should be trained in skilled professions.
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,
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workers
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 are vital when new buildings are constructed ,and when existing buildings have to be renovated or simply maintained.
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, permanent maintenance staff is employed in museums, hospitals, and schools, ensuring the safety of
people
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 that use the buildings.
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, in many developed countries, there is an existing imbalance in the economy, resulting in graduate unemployment, while at the same time there is a shortage of manual labour.
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, governments should work with employers to ensure that extra vocational training
courses
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 are provided. More
people
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 should be encouraged to attend vocational training
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. The most important thing is that schools should incorporate relevant subjects into their curriculum, which do not place all the emphasis on preparation for academic studies at university.
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, workshops in schools should provide an opportunity for schoolchildren to learn “hands-on skills”, and to adapt the physics theory into practical lessons. Another thing is that governments should work with employers to ensure that extra vocational
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 are provided.
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, parents should help their children to follow vocational
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, explaining the good job prospects and remuneration for
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 with skills and qualifications. In conclusion, I think that more
people
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 should be encouraged to pursue academic studies, because ,without them, society can not function effectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • skilled workers
  • vocational training
  • academic study
  • qualified
  • electricians
  • plumbers
  • technicians
  • hands-on experience
  • job market
  • infrastructure
  • economy
  • unemployment rates
  • consumer spending
  • educational paths
  • job satisfaction
  • societal resilience
  • versatile workforce
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