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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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In recent years,
children
, like adults, have become increasingly exposed to
computers
. While some child psychologists have claimed that
this
 is a good thing, others have claimed that it has an overwhelmingly detrimental impact on
children
. In
this
 essay, I shall draw upon a number of studies in cognitive science and industrial psychology that reveal the positive and negative aspects of
this
 phenomenon.
To begin
 with, there are
clearly
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 reasons why
computers
 do not allow
children
 to develop
long
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 attention spans.
This
 is because
computers
 are packed with many supposedly child-friendly games that require minimal levels of concentration in order to be enjoyed.
For example
, a study by the New York Child Learning Association found that
children
 who read from picture books were 50% less likely to get distracted than
children
 who played educational computer games.
Therefore
computers
 almost certainly have a negative impact on young
children
.
However
, since the world has become heavily reliant on
computers
, there are
also
clearly
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 advantages to exposing
children
 to
computers
.
This
 is because
children
 with
such
 exposure will stand a better chance of finding employment.
For example
, after being interviewed by Yale psychologists, over 70% of young office workers admitted that they had spent long hours on
computers
 in their middle and late childhood years.
Therefore
 it is clear that computer exposure can be beneficial to
children
. In conclusion, there are advantages and disadvantages to early computer exposure.
However
, if, in the future, the quality of educational gaming is increased, there is good reason to believe that these negative consequences will fall entirely away.
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