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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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It is undeniable that many accommodations
such
 as houses and condominiums in some countries were built for a long time. As the result, many persons are becoming interested
the
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history
 of the
house
 or building they live in, and they want to find out about their residential. From my point of view, I think that they have many reasons that made them interested in the
house
history
, and they
also
 have many methods to find out. In the following paragraph, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined in the detail. It is true to say that one of the major reasons
of
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 finding out about the
history
 of their accommodation is that
people
 are often afraid the
house
 they live in had been robbed or someone had died.
Additionally
,
people
 consider
safety
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 of the accommodations they stay in because if the building were built for a long time, they should maintain it before they move in.
For example
, many persons in Thailand modern society are often searching some information about the building before they make the decision to buy or rent due to they consider the problems which will come later.
In addition
,
people
 have
the
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different methods to find out about the structure
history
.
For instance
, Internet service has used the maximum to search some information about their building due to it is
easily
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 to access with everyone, and asking some
neighbors
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 who stay for
long
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a long
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 time before they move in is
also
 a good way. In conclusion, fear and safety are the factors that lead
people
 to start researching the
history
 of their
home
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.
Therefore
, it is recommended that finding out about the
history
 of the
house
 is an important thing that everybody should do before
decision
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the decision
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 to move in.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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