More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. What are the most serious problems associated with obesity and what solutions can you suggest?
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thier
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uneffective
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ineffective
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parents should provide less fatty food for Correct your spelling
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kids,Correct your spelling
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themselves
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thier
taking care of themselves. Correct your spelling
their
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goverment
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government
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the citizens, Change preposition
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family in the park, which Correct your spelling
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countries leads to many companies producing more well foods in the future.
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the
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issue should be clarified in each Linking Words
sectors
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goverment
operations. Those will be gradually supporting Correct your spelling
government
adapation
to become a positive trend.Correct your spelling
adaptation
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