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Some people think children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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A child’s upbringing plays an indisputably significant role in shaping a person. Some people believe that
parents
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 have a certain responsibility for
children
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’s
mistakes
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 as they should prevent
children
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 from them, while others think that
children
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 should be allowed to make
mistakes
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 freely. There is a strong case to be made for both sides of the debate. On the one hand, supporters of
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’ intervention highlight that most of the
mistakes
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children
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 are prone to making are unnecessary and avoidable.
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,
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 should teach their
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 to be careful with dangerous things
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 as knives, fire, and electricity rather than let them experience and get hurt.
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,
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 are responsible for raising and protecting their
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 from harm.
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, by preemptively helping their
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 avoid making
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,
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 feel better about themselves due to their endeavours in fulfilling the duty.
On the other hand
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, advocates of the trial and error method often argue that
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 cannot be around their kids all the time, so
children
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 make
mistakes
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 when experiencing new things is inevitable.
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, there are many invaluable lessons that
children
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 can learn through
mistakes
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, which might not be taught by any educational method. A child who did get hurt by playing with fire may be more cautious in
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 a situation without being warned by an adult,
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.
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 but not least, from
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 side of the debate, people emphasize that
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 who are shielded from everything will grow up to be self-centred and over-dependent on other people. In conclusion, I believe that the stronger argument is letting
children
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 learn from their
mistakes
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, with all the advantages of preparing them for their future.
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,
parents
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 should intervene and give guidance whenever
children
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 suffer from a hard problem or make a big mistake.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom to make mistakes
  • critical thinking skills
  • lifelong learning
  • guided learning environment
  • resilience
  • independence
  • overprotective
  • dependency
  • problem-solving skills
  • confidence
  • negative consequences
  • learning process
  • personal growth
  • trial and error
  • balance safety and learning
  • development
  • support and guidance
  • empowerment
  • risk-taking
  • life lessons
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