Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent to you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some
people
argue that there are highly lots of options for contemporary
people
.
This
view deserves a significant topic of discussion by ordinary citizens as well as politicians in terms of
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and disadvantages of the capitalistic society. As
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representative citizen of
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in South Korea, I partly agree with the statement above. The reasons why are as follows. Undoubtedly, modern citizens in advanced nations are surrounded by material prosperity
that is
confronted with enormously more options than those of the past hundred years.
For example
, nowadays workers face
choices
of which meals
such
as black bread, rice soup, and so on, are suitable for breakfast and lunch on their way to commute from early morning, whereas those in
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20th century are concerned about whether they could afford to eat something.
Furthermore
, new products which had not existed before
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over the world to attract a number of consumers like
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smartphones
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, tablet
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computers
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, and etc, which push
people
to have difficulties in selecting one of them.
On the other hand
, more than half of the population on earth are suffered from severe poverty, which brings few
choices
to the
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unfortunate
residents of some societies with domestically low income. According to
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aids organization,
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third
of newborn babies gets to pass away in 1 week in undeveloped countries.
Also
, adults are less likely to seek
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decent jobs
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and remain poor lives due to underperformed economy.
As a result
, many
people
have
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or lack of
choices
, even with
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options compared to their ancestors in African nations. To conclude, the argument that
people
have too many
choices
is persuasive when it comes to highly developed societies.
However
, the rest of the world population have fewer
choices
than before.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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