Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The family unit is a
first
and smallest communities
, but it is the most important unit as well. Many basic skills in their life are begun in their house including adaptation, patience, mental management or etc. As I mentioned that no matter how much the family important with children, it is not enough. Fix the agreement mistake
community
However
, This
cannot be a responsibility with parents alone.
The school
is the second
unit that teaches the first
social rules in public. Therefore
, the school
consists of many students with a variety backgrounds
. Respecting Change preposition
of backgrounds
with
Change preposition
apply
other
, punctuality, Correct pronoun usage
others
open minded
and Add a hyphen
open-minded
adaptation
are educated in Replace the word
adapting
school
. Nowadays we have stayed in school
longer than our house. We have spent time around 8-10 hours with 5 days per week in our school
. That is
almost 50% of our time per day. The social etiquette, characteristic of my personality, positive attitude, adaptability and flexibility, as well as, some concept in my life, I have gotten them from school
. However
, in my opinion
the Add a comma
,opinion
school
is equally important compared with family.
In conclusion, there are
a responsibility together with family and Change the verb form
is
school
to teach children to be a good members
of society in the future. The family is important about mental management and adaptation, as an interpersonal skill. Correct the article-noun agreement
a good member
good members
Therefore
, the school
educates the basic social skills to be a good members
.Correct the article-noun agreement
a good member
good members
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite