Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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and smallest
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, but it is the most important unit as well. Many basic skills in their life are begun in their house including adaptation, patience, mental management or etc. As I mentioned that no matter how much the family important with children, it is not enough.
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,
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cannot be a responsibility with parents alone. The
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is the
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unit that teaches the
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social rules in public.
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, the
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consists of many students with a variety
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. Respecting
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other
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, punctuality,
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and
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are educated in
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. Nowadays we have stayed in
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longer than our house. We have spent time around 8-10 hours with 5 days per week in our
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.
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almost 50% of our time per day. The social etiquette, characteristic of my personality, positive attitude, adaptability and flexibility, as well as, some concept in my life, I have gotten them from
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.
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, in my
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the
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is equally important compared with family. In conclusion, there
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a responsibility together with family and
school
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to teach children to be
a good members
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of society in the future. The family is important about mental management and adaptation, as an interpersonal skill.
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, the
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educates the basic social skills to be
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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