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some people think that secondery school children should study international news as one of the school subject. give reasons for your answer and includ any relevent example from your own knowledge

#people #secondery #school #children #study #news #includ #relevent
Global
news
 is crucial for every
indivuduals
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individuals
individual
 in the world to know. Certain people have demanded
this
 to be one required subject at
secondery
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secondary
 school as learning about international
news
 can improve pupils' critical thinking and broaden their
knowledge
. Knowing what
issue
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issues
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 foreign countries are encountering and how they solve
that
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 problems
helps
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 learners to develop critical thinking skills. The class will
makes
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 them curious
the
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occurance
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occurrence
 of various incidents and question what, why, and how certain countries act in
a different ways
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different ways
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 with certain issues. Because of
this
, their thinking system
tend
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 to develop simultaneously. Thai students who study about the current US election have considered the winning of Trump, using their critical thinking skills and after
that
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 it
is develop
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is developed
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.
In addition
,
by
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doing
this
also
 gives more
knowledge
 to children. They will know more about other land's livings and situations rather than recognizing just their own country. Not only
they
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 know about
news
, but
also
 learn about the methods and solutions that other
coutries
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countries
 use to tackle and
this
 helps
further
 their
knowledge
. Learning about
US
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 election, Thai students
also
 have a better understanding of the process
of
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it
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apply
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. In conclusion,
internatiional
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international
news
 study enables children to extend both their critical thinking and
knowledge
. At the end of the day, if schools do not include
this
, students may be permitted
from
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extra brain
developing
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development
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global awareness, fostering, interconnectedness, critical thinking, analyzing, bias, complexities, proficiency, debates, articulate, empathy, cultural sensitivity, diverse cultures, global citizenship, globalized world, interconnected, economic, political, social landscape, informed, responsible, global issues
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