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Globalization is positive for economies but its negative sides should not be ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Globalization
 is the development of our society that allows the economies of one country to thrive. Even Though it benefits countries’ money flow in the country, individuals should not overlook the drawbacks. I strongly agree with
this
 thinking as some local businesses could be disrupted and physical labour could be replaced due to
globalization
. We cannot deny the fact that
globalization
 systems tend to advantage a huge multinational company over a small native
business
. Because of international companies establishing,
people
 rather choose and buy them over no-name businesses in their local area;
hence
, the rich
business
 becomes richer, while the poor
business
 gets poorer. All of my teenage friends prefer buying clothes from international stores
such
 as Zara and H&M than clothes at the local stores and I think in the future
people
 will not buy clothes from those local stores anymore.
In addition
, low-skilled workers could be replaced by the use of
advanced-technological
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 machines.
Globalization
 enables technology to improve rapidly to help humans achieve difficult tasks and because of the invention of smart mechanisms, entrepreneurs of many factories replace humans with those devices for more convenience and effectiveness. In the past, my uncle worked for one cloth factory, but now he got fired because his factory purchased machines that process faster than him. In conclusion,
although
globalization
 may benefit monetary aspects in a country, it
also
 restricts other areas like local
business
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 and
people
 from thriving. At the end of the day, I am in complete agreement that
people
 should see both two faces of the coin.
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