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You recently recieved a letter frin a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • say why he/she would not enjoy going to college • explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her • suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear Divya, I hope
this
 letter finds you in good health. I am writing
this
 letter to suggest you opt for either education or employment in the following year. I think that choosing to get hands-on experience will bring more fruition to your career. As we have known each other since childhood, I know that you have always been keen on extracurricular activities rather than studying academics. Concerning your personality, attending college will accommodate you in full-
time
 studies and would barely leave any
time
 from your sports schedule.
This
 might cause a conflict in
time
 devoted to your hobbies.
Moreover
, since it has been more than a decade since you graduated from high school, pursuing another credential at
this
 moment will be arduous for you to keep up with your academic performance. I highly contend that you must seek employment opportunities.
This
 will not only help you to gain experience but it is a better way to enhance your inner qualities
such
 as understanding a sense of responsibility, punctuality,
time
 management, and many other interpersonal skills. Opting for the job might allow you to work for flexible hours and will allocate spare
time
 that can be devoted to your hobbies. We can meet up one day to look for advertisements posted for physical training instructors. I have a few jobs shared from my contacts and I believe jobs like Sports teacher, fitness trainer, and yoga instructor may neither restrict your work timings nor limit your presence in school. Waiting for the response about your decision. Best Regards, Simar
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Task Achievement
Make sure to fully address all parts of the task. While the recommendation to get a job was covered, there could have been a more thorough discussion on why college would not be enjoyable.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a clear logical structure and an appropriate range of cohesive devices. Components such as clear introductory sentences and better connectors can improve readability and flow.
Lexical Resource & Grammatical Range
Employ a wider variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance the letter. Aim to show off your language skills while maintaining clarity and precision.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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