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In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Entertainment is one of the significant activities for
children
 to experience at an early age.
However
, some countries discourage them from having much
time
 for leisure, and
instead
, they encourage them to study hard for extended hours for their futures. I believe one of the major causes is the social structure of the nations.
This
 essay will suggest the contributors and solutions tackle
this
 social problem.
For example
, Chinese school
students
 are among the most under
pressure
 in the world; they are studying for long hours every day. What makes
children
 toll so much is its country’s social structure. Generally, only people with good academic backgrounds can get a job with high salaries in China.
That is
 because the job status is given to them according to their abilities like theoretical and critical thinking skills, so they live in a strict meritocracy. Not only
children
 themselves but
also
 their parents encourage them to study hard. To enter famous universities, every turning point of the entrance examination counts. Parents support their
children
 to get into an elite primary school, proceed to a reputable junior and senior high school, and enrol them in a famous university. They tend to put excessively high
pressure
 on their
children
 because they invest a lot of money in their education.
This
 high
pressure
 makes them stressed and unable to enjoy leisure activities or take them away from entertainment. The Chinese government should take counter-actions to cope with the problem.
For instance
, all colleges should increase their capacity to offer many
students
 academic opportunities as much as possible fairly. If more educational institutions are available for
students
, the competition for entrance examinations would be a bit easier.
Thus
children
 will have more
time
 for entertaining activities. Overall,
children
 in some countries are struggling towards their studies due to their country’s social background.
Therefore
, I hope more
students
 in the nations can have more
time
 and enjoy it, not just for their studies.In some ,countries young people have little leisure
time
 and are under a lot of
pressure
 to work hard in their studies.
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