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Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What are the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective in reducing crime levels?

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In many nations, committing a crime has been increasing among teenagers. Primary causes are paying less
attention
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 to youngsters and being under threat.
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, the situation could improve if
parents
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 and government pay more
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 to adolescents. Primarily, nowadays both
parents
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 often work full
time
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. It seems to be
children
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 are lacking
attention
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.
Parents
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 don’t know what their
children
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 are doing. If
parents
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 didn’t pay
attention
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 to teenagers they could join gangs. it can be lead them to commit a crime.
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, young people tend to spend more
time
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 on social media or watching television. Watching movies that involved violence might harm
children
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’s
behaviour
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.
Children
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 might absorb negative patterns of
behaviour
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. Turning to possible solutions,
parents
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 should devote some
time
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 to their
children
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. Spending
time
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 with
children
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 can help them develop good patterns of
behaviour
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.
Parents
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 should be aware of what their
children
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 are watching on television and the internet. Encouraging
children
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 to read more books might be one way to develop good
behaviour
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. Overall, the key problems of committing a crime among young people can be a lack of
attention
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 and social influence.
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