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Describe the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city.

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Nowadays, living in a city is great. There are a number of benefits and drawbacks of living in an urban
set up
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. In
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 essay, I am going to discuss these views. To start with,
cities
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 are more developed and offer access to public amenities. All around the world, governments invest heavily
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building
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of
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public facilities and infrastructures. These social amenities include schools, hospitals and community
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. Some of the best health facilities in Kenya,
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, are found in the largest
cities
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 like Nairobi and Mombasa. As
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, dwellers are able to access
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high-quality education and health services.
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, there are a wide variety of jobs for low and high-skilled people. Workers can be employed in industries, banks, hotels or supermarkets among others.
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, in Nairobi majority of the residents are working in
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area
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,
city
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center
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the transport sector.
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, insecurity cases are rampant in
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. The level of high unemployment is high and
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, unemployed youth engage in criminal activities. Like in Mombasa, young generations are selling illegal drugs and engaged in violent robberies. These activities make living in developed areas unsafe. In
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, environmental pollution is quite high. The rivers, land and air are heavily polluted
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 making the living environment unsuitable for habitation. The causes of pollution in
cities
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 like New Delhi and Nairobi are transportation and manufacturing. To summarize, urban dwellers enjoy the benefits like good transportation,
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 services, access to employment. They
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 face issues like insecurity and unconducive living spaces occasioned by environmental pollution.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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