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people think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. give your opinion.

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The use of
fuel
 gradually has the worst
impact
 on environmental issues. Some people believe that increasing the price of
fuel
 for vehicles can
bedecreasing
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be decreasing
decreasing
 the
impact
 on the natural surroundings in the future. Even though there are people who are declined, in
this
 paper, I will partially agree with
this
 solution. Increasing the price of oil for vehicles can cause harm
for
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 society. Especially the
impact
 on the economy.
For instance
, the cost of commodities and transportation will be as costly as the cost of
fuel
. The public would have difficulty fulfilling their basic needs and maybe increase the percentage of poverty in the country.
However
,
this
 phenomenon might be impactful for the middle down society
instead
 of the wealthy community.
On the other hand
, with regards to the price of oil increasing, users of
thefuel
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the fuel
energy
 will decrease.
Nevertheless
,
thescientists
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the scientists
scientists
 will
then
 invent
thealternative
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the alternative
energy
 to replace
theoil
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the oil
.
For instance
, biogas
energy
which
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apply
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is made from organic waste and
a
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fuel
 made from plants or vegetable materials. Those fuels are
anenvironmentally
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environmentally
an environmentally
 friendly and can be accepted by society.
In addition
,
theinventors
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the inventors
the investors
 will be finding
energy efficient
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energy-efficient
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 vehicles in the future. And Tesla is a good example of
this
, namely Elon Musk designing an electric car charged
by
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energy
 from electricity or a solar panel. In conclusion, I believe
this
 decision will be better for the environment as well as human beings and I wholeheartedly support
this
 argument, even though some people will feel the enormous
impact
 in the
first
 phase. Better solutions are invented to replace the use of oil.
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