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Some people dislike changes in their society and in their own lives and want things to stay the same Why do some people want things to stay the same? Why should changes be regarded as something positive

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it is true that nothing in life is permanent except
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. Changes in society and our lives are inevitable.We all get older, friends and family move away , and our employment situation can suddenly
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. Understandably, many people wish everything could stay the same. In
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 view and explain why it is better to embrace
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. Wanting to feel in control of our lives is perfectly normal. We often feel vulnerable when events in society occur which are beyond our control or when we cannot be sure of the outcome of something. The uncertainty caused by the COVID-19 pandemic is an example of
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. Changes in our personal circumstances can
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, when a friend or family member moves away, we may experience a deep sense of loss. Ironically, even good changes can bring uncertainty. If we receive a promotion, we may struggle with imposter syndrome and wrestle with a fear of failure. Despite these perfectly natural feelings, I think it is good to embrace
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. Since
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 is unavoidable, it is much better to accept
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 to become consumed by negative thinking. When we remain positive, we may find that a
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 actually benefits us in the long run. Adapting to
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 helps us develop resilience, a quality that can help us face an obstacle and see an opportunity in it. As highlighted above, sooner or later, we will all face
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 is unsettling, it is vital to keep focused on the positive aspects of our circumstances. Doing so can help us unlock new opportunities that not were available to us.
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Grammar
Ensure all sentences are fully fleshed out to avoid minor grammatical errors or awkward phrases. For example, 'realityt han' should be 'reality than'.
Introduction
Provide a brief overview of the points you are going to discuss in your introduction to make it more compelling.
Structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which neatly frame the discussion.
Examples
Arguments are logical and well-supported with relevant real-life examples like the COVID-19 pandemic and job promotions.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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