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Billions of dollars are being wasted each year on space research. The money could be better used to improve conditions on earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#billions #dollars #year #space #research #money #conditions #earth
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recent years, investors and governments around the world are investing a lot of money in
space related
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 studies. In my humble opinion, these
billions
 could be used in
bettering
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 conditions on earth.
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 view and give reasons
to
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 that effect.
To begin
 with, a lot of
billions
 could be invested in renewable sources of energy. Wind and solar power,
for instance
, are renewable and friendly to
environment
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the environment
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. These sources will go a long way in addressing environmental pollution caused by burning fossil
fuel
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fuels
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.
For example
, recently, the government of Kenya invested
billions
 of shillings in putting up wind power
farm
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farms
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 in Longayalani. It is believed that it will supply clean energy to thousands of households and industrial premises in our country and beyond.
Furthermore
, governments and investors could use their
billions
 in the invention of environmental-friendly items like machines and vehicles. Tesla is a good example of companies manufacturing electric cars. Other private and government institutions should spend their cash
in
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such
 projects that will reduce the consumption of oil products
thus
 reducing environmental problems the world is grappling with at the moment. In my view, the causes and major environmental issues are not on space. They are,
however
, on earth.
For instance
, deforestation, poaching and release of carbon dioxide into the atmosphere occur here.
Therefore
, money should be directed
in
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 research and campaigns that will address
such
 challenges. To summarize, we need to invest heavily in courses that will address environmental issues that affect the world right now. Investors can invest in environmental-friendly products whereas governments should venture into infrastructural projects.
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