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Many young people change their jobs and careers. What are the reasons for this, Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Jobs and Careers have been changed by young
people
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 in recent years for several reasons.
One
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 cause could be that young
people
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 need to explore what they really want in life, another could be the lack of opportunities that work-life has and
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 money issues.
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, young
people
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 normally in order to have a better job, a study in a University. The initial year is always the same for all the students because colleges teach basic courses
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 as math, science and language, but the problem begins when the students enter the
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 course of their career. For ,example some students don't like spending every day analyzing data or speaking, and communicating with other
people
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 but their future job would require that, for that reason they change their careers for
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 that fits them better. Another reason could be that young
people
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 are not mature enough to decide on a career and they need time to
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 analyze themselves in order to enrol in the University.
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, money has become
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 of the reasons for some
people
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 to leave their jobs and find another. It is well known that if they work in a few developing areas they can earn more money than other
people
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. But normally working in jobs that only satisfy them in
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 area brings a lot of problems
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 as stress, irritability and dissatisfaction. As an overview young
people
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 need to explore all the possibilities that a University and a Company would give because it is the only way to figure out what they really want in life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career switch
  • job dissatisfaction
  • financial incentives
  • personal fulfillment
  • professional advancement
  • exploratory journey
  • toxic workplace
  • acquisition of new competencies
  • workplace flexibility
  • adapting to evolving industries
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