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To much money is being spent on reestablishing old buildings ,it would be better to spent this money on building new buildings. do you agree or disagree

#money #buildings
It has long been suspected that it might be better to construct a modern building as opposed to recreating ancient
buildings
 which require a large number of sums.
Although
 ,personally I can neither complete agree nor disagree with
this
 statement because every coin has two sides Some people claim that it's quite beneficial to spend money on reestablishing old
buildings
 . I contradict the above claim and believe that money should be spent on new
buildings
 due to the following reasons.
Firstly
, the astonishing design of the new
buildings
 forms the
first
 impression in every individual and
therefore
, makes it more eye-catchy and pleasurable.
This
 scenario can be possible by forming new
buildings
 and can't be achieved by building old ancient
buildings
 .
Also
 , congenial varieties of hotels accommodated with profound facilities
such
 as swimming pools, luxuries hotels as well as foods ranging from Continental to Indian foods can be supplemented to enhance the beauty of the hotels making it more aesthetical .
For instance
 , Largess the biggest hotel in Pakistan offers a large variety of food ranging from Chinese cuisines to Arab cuisines.
On the other hand
 , money can
also
 be invested in building parks and gardens near the boundaries of each building making it more mesmerising , thereby provide a calm and relaxed environment for the people .
This
 enhances the economic and financial status of the country by attracting various tourists across the globe. The conclusion to be drawn is that new
buildings
 have a significant impact on developing bucolic,I genuinely think that governments and organizations should equally pay attention to a new type of construction.
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