Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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some that advertisement has enormous success in persuading us to shop

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others argue that a large number of advertising activities has made

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insensitive to

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. In my opinion, advertisement has remained exponentially successful in making us buy things we do not really need

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. I will discuss both views in my essay. On the one hand, it is thought that companies have been enormously successful in making believe to get

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that might not be the requirement of the

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, real estate companies in Pakistan are

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booming business activities by putting commercials in print and social media like newspapers and WhatsApp respectively to attract customers.

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, organisations, which are having robust marketing strategies are attracting more

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weak marketing.

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, it is understood that advertisements are widespread and

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made

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attention anymore. Take as an example ,

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travelling on the busy roads of the city there are billboards full of things with prices and pictures but commuters are least pushed for seeing things that they see every day.

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excessive commercial campaign has made dwellers not

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any heed to what's being offered and they buy whatever they need.

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people

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have become more intelligent in selecting

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and don't really consider what is being said in the media. In conclusion, advertisement plays a vital role in selling products and

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people

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buy

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that are promoted. In my ,opinion adverts are extremely successful in helping

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decide what to buy and the range of

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available in the market.

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task response

Ensure a clear, consistent position is presented regarding the two views on advertising and provide relevant examples to support your arguments.

coherence and cohesion

Improve the connection between ideas within and between paragraphs, and ensure a clear introduction and conclusion are included to guide the reader through the essay.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

274 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

persuade
promote
attract
influence
impact
consumerism
commercialism
market
product
brand
endorsement
manipulative
saturated
overwhelmed
repetitive
distracting
irrelevant
exaggerated
misleading
desensitized

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