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With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. Some people see this is a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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 of thirty decades. Overall, the teachers’ salaries accounted for 40
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 but increased to 50
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 in the course of ten years. After, faced small descent
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 in 1981. The total
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 to 15
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 over the thirty years. In 1981, the
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. The
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 of expenses for furniture and resources book fluctuated fall 5
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 in 1991
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 in 2001, whereas
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 of book resources went up about 5
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 between 1981 and 1991 and dramatically decreased to 9
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 to 8
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. As the chart illustrates, schools need to expense for wide range
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 and they account for constant cost.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Portability
  • Accessibility
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Environmental conservation
  • Tactile experience
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Digital fatigue
  • Prolonged screen time
  • Technical issues
  • Independent bookstores
  • Piracy issues
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