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Some people think technology makes life complex, so we should make life simpler without using technology. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is suggested that
technology
 should not be used, because it makes
people
’s life overly complex. I disagree with
this
 statement. Those who think
technology
 has made
people
’s life overly complicated may offer the following convincing reasons.
First
 of all,
the
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technological devices can cause squandering of
people
’s
time
.Since some devices require
people
 to learn
to
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how to use them and fix them when they crash, it is difficult, especially for
the
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elderly
people
 and children.
Therefore
, it may waste
people
’s
time
. What’s more, online activities may contribute to
people
’ s lack of sense of insecurity and financial loss.
For instance
, it is the personal data
people
 type during online shopping that has caused hackers to reuse them illegally.
However
, supporters of
technology
also
 have reasonable arguments.
Firstly
, some
technologic
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 machines help
people
 to do some routine tasks,
such
 as washing machines or rice cookers. They allow us to have more free
time
, boosting our life efficiency.
Then
 the telecommunication tools benefit to cultivating
people
’s bonded and close relationship with others. Undoubtedly, it is the mobile phones or video chats that have always
allowing
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 students who study abroad to stay connected with their families and friends all the
time
, without spending
time
on
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commuting to post offices or waiting for
the
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replies. Without the
technology
, students living at a distance would not keep
close
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relationship
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 with friends or families not required. As discussed above,
technology
 improves the standard of
people
’s living. But there are some negative impacts for
people
 to use
technology
. I believe more efficient technologies in future will overcome those problems.
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