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oday the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree with these views?

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Nowadays,
advertisement
 has a huge impact on
customer
's behaviour. In my point of view, I totally agree with the statement that a large number of sales of the products are affected by advertising and It may not consider as needed products for the society.
To begin
 with, the
advertisement
 can appear on various platforms especially on social media
such
 as Youtube, Facebook and Twitter. Most of the advertisements are direct marketing advertisements that attack directly to the target group.
Therefore
, the ads company can control the reaching the
advertisement
 and can make the target
customer
 sees the ads as many times as they want, until the
customer
 purchase the
product
. They can use social media tools to lead the
customer
's behaviour on the online platforms.
Therefore
, the
customer
 might create an impulse buy without concern about necessary.
Secondly
, The power of using presenters for advertising has an intense effect on people's perceptions. The presenter or influencer can represent the brand's image that might arouse the want of customers.
Moreover
, the influencer can create the
customer
's trust by presenting the properties of the
product
.
For example
, the superstar of Thailand introduces a new
product
 that will improve our immune system.
This
 kind of
advertisement
 might cause enormous purchasing ,
,
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 it is not because of the
product
 itself, but it is because of the presenter.
This
 situation shows that the presenter can be the priority reason for
product
 purchasing, not the effeteness of the
product
. In conclusion, the increase in
customer
 buying power is the consequence of effective
advertisement
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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