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Some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The environment is a valuable part of our and other alife organism's life.
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, in modern days number of
people
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 do not notice environmental issues
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 as the extinction of
plants
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 and
animals
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. Some
people
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 think that there are more significant environmental
problems
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. Even so, I believe that there are other
problems
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 which are
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 important as well as the loss of particular species of
plants
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 and
animals
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. Without a doubt, the environment is a wonderful and universal place for
animals
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 and new species of
plants
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, there are some advantages for the public. Personality uses the flower and
animals
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 for getting treatments and even clothes from their skins. A perfect example of these are poachers, who killed
animals
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 to make more money and sell them to others. One more example of
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 is fire, which
people
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 do or nature fire. Bonfire in the forest is one of the most terrible things as well as poachers which destroys not only creatures but
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plants
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. Some may argue that in the world other numerous environmental
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.
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 pollution or global warming, a tornado or earthquake.
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, the most environmental problem is what
people
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 do with their arms. We could do something to avoid fire, pollution, gases from factories and other aspects. Every day we use cars, factories and fresheners, but these gases destroy our atmosphere and let sunlight pass through layers. With that ,activities we can save our planet and keep it safe. In conclusion, there are many environmental
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 of our time.
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, we have to do everything at least prevent our mistakes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • habitat
  • extinction
  • climate change
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • global warming
  • sustainable
  • conservation
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