Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education
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is one of the most important
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that can help a person throughout his
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. While a section of people believes that for child's development, it is better that
children
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be
home
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-tutored, others hold the opinion that
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in school is significantly important for
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development, a perspective
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supported by me since
schools
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offer a wider range of experiences.
Home
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-tutoring
children
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has
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a positive impact on the development of the child in his early
life
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. It is
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believed
that during the budding stage of
children
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, they are to be nurtured with love and care and
home
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evironment
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environment
offers the best place for proper nurturing of
children
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because the quality and the amount of love and care bestowed by the parents is unparallel in all respect, helping
children
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to understand the
essense
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essence
of
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, the famous poet Rabindranath Tagore was taught at
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and he is believed to have created some of the best works that
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the state of human psychology.
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helps us
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believe
in the positive outcomes that
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teaching can have in man's early
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. The modern
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,
however
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, demands that
children
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should participate in
schools
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. Because the
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is rapidly changing and becoming
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, it is important that
children
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learn the art of adjusting to complex situations right from their early
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.
Schools
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offer
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challenging
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and acquiring the valuable lesson of coping up with
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challengers
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can help a man throughout his
life
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.
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, most of the famous personalities in today's time are sent to
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rather than
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home schooled
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homeschooled
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.
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instances of successful personalities make a strong case supporting the view that school
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is very important for grooming
children
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. To conclude,
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home schooling
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plays an important role in proper nurturing of child's mental health, in my
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it is important that
children
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be sent to
schools
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since challenges in early
life
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help people to become mentally
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to face
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modern
world
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. An individual should take into consideration the existing scenario in the
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while making choices for their
children
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related to
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in
home
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and
education
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in
schools
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.
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