Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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charge admission

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while others do not. I believe that the advantage of charging the

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which can be used to advance facilities is outweighed by the disadvantage that fewer

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will come to the

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. Many believe that charging

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admission

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is best to advance the

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's facilities.

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, the funding can bring some more equipment or

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exhibitions in order to improve

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and have various types of activities in that place.

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, the money can be used to renovate and conserve its facilities,

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as bathrooms and

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lobby that helps the

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to remain open and available for visitors.

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Louvre

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in Paris requires 15 euros for each visitor.

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, there are new

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exhibitions every week and the

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always looks like a brand new building which attracts more

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visitors people

to get in. Having said that, I believe that high

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will exclude

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from coming to the

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.

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, there are some groups of

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that earn money to support only food and shelter, like

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in some developing countries where enjoying some

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or cultural exhibitions is one of their few choices which is free of charge.

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, my friend and I, who are students that do not have enough supporting finance, going to

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or some

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shows are activities that we can do together and learn about the world. In conclusion,

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many

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charge an entry fee while others do not. I recommend that the government should subsidize the

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and their citizens to increase the chance for

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to

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