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Write an essay at least 250 words about your visiting to a popular place.

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Have you ever wanted to enjoy your spectacular holidays in a luxurious massive fabulous
resort
 ? Located in lovely Vietnam, FLC Sam Son has been one of
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most amazing choices of
visitors
 for years. One place especially worth visiting for those who are interested in swimming in the
beach
 and swimming
pool
.
First
 of all, the
resort
 is surrounded by
the
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stunning enormous trees and
beach
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beaches
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, which emit
the
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comfortable fresh air for all
visitors
. The building is absolutely huge that make a remarkable point
in
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 people here. When it is time for lunch or dinner, the meal is prepared for everyone carefully by the waiters. About the accommodation,
rooms
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 are really wonderful, spotless and comfortable with soft white pillows. The most extraordinary thing in
this
resort
 is the rooftop swimming
pool
. It is called the "infinity
pool
". There is no clear reason why it is named that, but
visitors
 find it really great and fantastic. "Infinity
pool
" is really clean that can be seen through clearly, like a pane of glass. If you do not have an interest in
this
pool
 anymore, you can go to the nearby salty
beach
 with the light waves. The silence of
wind
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make
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this
beach
 way
more
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better. FLC Sam Son is an exceptional place, a truly modern
resort
 that has satisfied a large number of
visitors's
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need
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 in a memorable vacation. Most of
people
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visited
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who visited
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 here
have
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 a completely magnificent thought.
This
resort
 is recommended for those who love swimming, the main part of
this
 holiday place that cannot miss.
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