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Write an essay at least 250 words about your visiting to a popular place.

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Have you ever wanted to enjoy your spectacular holidays in a luxurious massive fabulous
resort
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 ? Located in lovely Vietnam, FLC Sam Son has been one of
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most amazing choices of
visitors
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 for years. One place especially worth visiting for those who are interested in swimming in the
beach
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 and swimming
pool
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.
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 of all, the
resort
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 is surrounded by
the
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stunning enormous trees and
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beach
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beaches
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, which emit
the
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comfortable fresh air for all
visitors
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. The building is absolutely huge that make a remarkable point
in
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for
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 people here. When it is time for lunch or dinner, the meal is prepared for everyone carefully by the waiters. About the accommodation,
rooms
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the rooms
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 are really wonderful, spotless and comfortable with soft white pillows. The most extraordinary thing in
this
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resort
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 is the rooftop swimming
pool
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. It is called the "infinity
pool
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". There is no clear reason why it is named that, but
visitors
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 find it really great and fantastic. "Infinity
pool
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" is really clean that can be seen through clearly, like a pane of glass. If you do not have an interest in
this
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pool
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 anymore, you can go to the nearby salty
beach
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 with the light waves. The silence of
wind
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the wind
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make
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makes
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this
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beach
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 way
more
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better. FLC Sam Son is an exceptional place, a truly modern
resort
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 that has satisfied a large number of
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visitors's
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need
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 in a memorable vacation. Most of
people
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the people
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visited
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who visited
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 here
have
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 a completely magnificent thought.
This
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resort
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 is recommended for those who love swimming, the main part of
this
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 holiday place that cannot miss.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural landmarks
  • economic impacts
  • tourism
  • revenue
  • historical identity
  • tangible connection
  • aesthetic appeal
  • educational activities
  • sustainable tourism
  • preservation practices
  • overcrowding
  • property values
  • job opportunities
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