Some people think that sport is very important for society. Others, however, argue that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some

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believe that exercising is crucial for the environment, the others think

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is nothing more than a pastime activity. There are an advantage and a disadvantage that will be discussed in the following paragraph. Nowadays, society

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interested in sport more and more than in the past. There are three benefit points.

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, society

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for better health.

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, lots of workers have to sit for doing works which are whole days, so they will be backache and got fat.

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, many

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have the amount of space after their finished work.

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, in the evening when

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are done with their jobs, there are hours which is one or two hours before their dinner

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, so it is better to work out in

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leisure hour.

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, everyone

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to be good

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; it cannot deny that

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impression is very important for everyone whom they meet, so exercising can improve

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shape of their body. From my experience, I used to

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over standard, so when I decreased my weight

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have

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good health and a better personality more and more.

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, there are two drawbacks

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statement. Only

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who are still young and older crowd that thinking of sport when they have a leisure life.

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, young

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who aged under 12 years old do exercising when they have a

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free time

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, by

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age, people are still eating and learn at school, so when there is spend

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families, do some

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sports

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is a good way to spend

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together with their parents. On the other

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, people who the old

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aged always do some sport,

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as yoga when they have leisure

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. In conclusion, working out is essential for society, the others think, there is nothing more than spend

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when a free

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. From my point of view, there are both benefits and drawbacks as the above that are detailed.