Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

The line graph represents the
amount
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of
coffee
exports in
kilograms
in Brazil, Columbia and Costa Rica from 2002 to 2012. Overall, the
coffee
export in Brazil showed an upward
trend
between 2002 and 2012.
Also
, Columbia showed a downward
trend
with some fluctuations over the same period. An interesting
trend
evident in the graph is that in
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year
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years
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2002 and 2006 11
kilograms
coffee
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was exported in Brazil. It showed a significant rise with little fluctuation and went up to 25
kg
in 2006.
Moreover
, Costa Rica showed a downward
trend
while
coffee
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the coffee
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trade of 15
kg
went down to 7kg from 2002 to 2006. After
this
, it peaked at 20
kg
in
next
six years.
Additionally
, Columbia started to sell from 5
kg
and increased up to 11
kilograms
over the year 2002 to 2006.
Besides
, it showed a downward
trend
only 2
kilograms
coffee
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was exported between 2006 and 2008. It rose up dramatically.
Moreover
, 15
kilograms
coffee
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was exported by the end of the period 2012.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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