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Some people consider thinking about and planning for the future to be a waste of time. They argue that people should simply live in the moment. Do you agree or disagree?

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It was argued that some
people
 always think and
plan
 for their future to be a waste of time, the other
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 should normally live in the present. In my opinion, I disagree, the reasons will be detailed as the following. On the one hand, if
people
 have a
plan
in
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 the future, they will follow
on
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their
plans
. If we look at
ourseleves
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ourselves
 when we were young, the teacher asked us that what is
your
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 dream.
Additionally
, sometimes there was a project
to
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 us
for
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writinh
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writing
 our dreams,
such
 as occupations, places to work, money, and draw a photo for
explainion
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explanation
explaining
.
Therefore
, we are
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touched
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 by the teacher which had to think forward in the future.
For instance
, when we were young, if we would like to be a doctor, it means that we should
to
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pay attention
for
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 reading more playing a game. In
particularly
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, we should
to
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choose specific subjects,
such
 as maths, science, physics, and biology.
Therefore
,
plannng
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planning
 to be a doctor has a lot of content to do, and it is easier life because there is
plan
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the plan
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.
On the other hand
, it
crucial
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 for
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planning
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planing
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planning
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, when
people
 meet a fail from
a
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one thing. It is
safely
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 than does not have any
plans
. The changing of life
is always happened
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. It is beneficial if we have a lot of
plans
 when we are doing something,
such
 a running a business, purchasing a house, selling a product on the internet, and
surpising
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surprising
 someone.
However
, if someone
need
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 to sell the products on the internet by trend, it is better when they have
plans
 for finding the special products to sell.
The
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first
 of all, they should
think
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 make
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the customer
a customer
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customer
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customers
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 to interested
of
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 their things.
For example
, the marketing should
plan
 for creating the promotion make and do the cover of products
diffently
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differently
. In conclusion, planning is essential before
start
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 to do anything. In my
opinion
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people
 should waste
of
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time
for
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thinking. It can decrease some of
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 because there
is
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 other ways to follow.
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